First of all she said what was good about our film:
-The first shot of the lift was good.
-The titles that are pushed by the train look
She then gave us feedback on what we needed to improve on for our final draft;
-The voice over came to early on the film, if people were just sitting down to watch the film they might miss it. It should come slightly later and should be slower and more serious, we will rerecord this.
-The shot of her walking along the platform at the train station is too wobbly, we need to re-film this or find a way to make the image still.
-The flashing to black is good as it builds tension but it happens to much so it begins to get annoying.
-The shot of Libby sitting look out the window holding her scrapbook is a nice shot so it should be longer.
-To fill more time we need to include 2 or 3 still shots of the scrapbook as it is so significant in the film.
-The sound effects title needs to be moved as it may be cut off once we export it.
-The effect on the tea cups looks to dark compared to the rest. We will change the saturation to make it lighter.
-The last title needs to come earlier as only trailers finish with the film title.
-The film is too short so we need to film some ore footage to make it to the required 2 minutes.